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[大魔鬼王] 【江山 风月 剑】第一集 丽句之乱 第一章 奉旨回朝

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鬼王不愧为欲书之王,其实更希望鬼王能来部轻虐既是调教类的都市.

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沒想到大魔鬼王大大這麼快又有新的作品,原本還想說可能要等到大魔鬼王先把母子天倫寫完才會寫新作,這次的新文應該也是走亂倫路線,光是看人物介紹就有一大堆的熟女了,大魔鬼王還真是厲害,這麼早就已經把後面會出現的人物設定都想好了,看來接下來只要等著看主角如何把這些熟女一一征服吧。大魔鬼王說這部作品有受到風月大陸的影響,看來背景和人物的設定上應該會走玄幻類的。我有一點想要建議的是,前作武林淫亂史寫的十分精采,只是我覺得過程稍為有些順利了些,如果可以的話,希望能讓主角能或多或少能夠受到些挫折,然後越挫越勇,畢竟勝敗乃兵家常事,人生就是有高潮起伏才顯得精采。
看大魔鬼王最後的留言說最近有事情要處理,希望大魔鬼王能早日將事情順利解決,期待新的一章的發表。

[ 本帖最后由 badboy7123 于 2009-2-22 23:50 编辑 ]
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  • dycrystal 金币 +5 回复认真。 2009-2-23 11:07

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dycrystal(2009-2-23 11:09): 「此篇文章不顶就不是人了」,您的回复中使用了严禁词语。
大大的创作力真是旺盛啊,而且对高大的美女小弟也特别偏爱,再次表示感谢~

ps,小弟一时不察用了禁用词,下次一定注意,还请版主手下留情啊

[ 本帖最后由 eisfeuer 于 2009-2-28 22:52 编辑 ]
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  • dycrystal 金币 -10 恶意灌水--老会员了,请自重! 2009-2-23 11:07

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This is yet another novel talking about the incest and adulteries which are so popular in recent readings.

It seems the writer follows a routine formular - the male character who is almight and strong in sex. He dominates lots of beautiful weman, no matter they are his mother, aunt or any close relationship in blood tie. He is always the winner and the weman  are his slaves.

The topic of the novel is very well named - "The Romantic Sward in The Kingdom" (Translated by me) The words "Romantic Sward" immediately suggests to the readers that they are prepared to read something that might be full of sex and bloodshed.

Then in the preview of the novel, the writer gives a brief instruction of the characteristic of each character who appears in the novel. This is a similar pattern of writing popular in nowadays writing. There are good points and bad points: it is good that the readers will have a summery of the characterisation of the major and minor characters in the story. Besides, they are given the information of the flow of the story so they know roughly what the story is about. Finally they are expected to read some very sexually explicit writings by the writer's choice of dictions in his introduction. But the most obvious drawback is just becuase the readers are given the basic background of the novel, they may lose the interest to go on reading.

Why? It is quite similar that a lady who wears sexy clothes with some sort of baring parts of her female organs, looks more attractive than a totally nude lady. It is simply based on the human nature of the male's human nature - the strong desire to spy and look for something hidden behind. It is the sense of "mystery" that will arouse the readers to go on reading in order to seek for the truth. But as the writer has given a summery of the background story, the readers' interests or curiorsity may be dampened as they more or less know what the story is about and what they expect to read.

Another similar formular is the ceasely love making during which the male character is the king of king not only in politics and power, but also in sex. He seems to have possessed endless energy in loving making, he won't feel tired even after series of ejacculations. But just because he is given by the writer such spetacular strenghth and sex power, he is able to conquer not only his kingdom, but also countless weman.

Whether you like it or not, this is the type of stories which are full of incest, adultery and endless sex scenes.

Starting from the beginning of the story, we are given a touch of the sexual description of how the son teases his mother and then follows the loving making with her. Then when the story goes on, we have more or less similar pattern of sex depition. This time may be his aunt, or next time may be his cousin etc. If the readers like this style of writing, they will never be disappointed because they will see and smell the nasty and brutal tastes in the love makings.

But as such a story is too male dominated, the weman are put to be slaved, no matter she is his mother or aunt. In today's view, it is of course unacceptable to those who hold strict standing of moral standard. But in the olden time, especially the story background takes place at the northern part of China, a man has married a number of wives is a common matter.

What we do miss out is the detail description of the inward and pyschological descriptions of the feelings of both sexes in love making. It seems they behave like dogs and bitches. Once they meet each other, they will start the love game.

I personally consider this novel will be more attractive if the novelist will give us an indepth characterisation of the feelings of the characters, no matter they are in sex making or not.
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  • dycrystal 金币 +15 点评认真。 2009-2-23 11:10
  • dycrystal +1 点评认真。 2009-2-23 11:10

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不错不错 非常有大家风范的一部作品看来头开的非常不错 情节铺垫的非常引人入胜,喜欢这种古朴的乱文啊 呵呵 期待更新!

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从人物介绍和背景分析上看,皇朝秘史的痕迹似乎相当地重,将它理解为皇朝秘史的山寨版或许并不过分。
当年皇朝秘史横空出世,着实掀起一阵复古热潮。但随后此书的太监却成了无数淫民心中永远的痛。楼主写作信誉一向出色,希望能将这部作品顺利完成,在此先谢过。

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看简介有点像皇朝,但又不会像皇朝那样是虐文,适合更多人的口味,太感谢鬼王同志了!

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大大受到皇朝影响可真深啊,但希望大大能把皇朝中那种上流社会中勾心斗角的气氛写的更深刻一点,毕竟上位者的争斗乐趣就在这里面了

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原帖由 irggl 于 2009-2-23 09:16 发表
从人物介绍和背景分析上看,皇朝秘史的痕迹似乎相当地重,将它理解为皇朝秘史的山寨版或许并不过分。
当年皇朝秘史横空出世,着实掀起一阵复古热潮。但随后此书的太监却成了无数淫民心中永远的痛。楼主写作信誉一向 ...
兄弟,你说我这是皇朝秘史的山寨版,首先你应当明白一点,山寨版是指作品的本质照搬原创作品,而在形式上有所区别。
皇朝秘史的重点,一是在于对女人的调教,另一个是权谋的运用。
我写江山受皇朝秘史影响大,但就本质而言,要突出的是战争场面,谋略的运用,以及男女之情。所以,兄台不要觉得山寨是个流行词就乱用。
如果看过风月大陆,兄弟应该可以从人物设定上看出,除了母亲等几个亲人角色外,人物上更加模拟了风月大陆。
说实话 ,我对风月大陆的两个遗憾,一是其中间太监了N长时间,后来虽然写完了,但总觉的是代笔的。二就是,如此规模的后宫文,竟然
没有乱伦的情节,未免遗憾。
所以,江山的内容基本上就是乱伦,后宫加征战大陆。

[ 本帖最后由 大魔鬼王 于 2009-2-23 11:38 编辑 ]

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大魔鬼王兄的新作开篇,首先在这里恭喜老兄,本文的内容安排看起来和垂死老头的皇朝秘史似乎有些相似,皇秘写的虽然及其出色,不过后来TJ,希望魔鬼的这篇文章能够创造皇秘一样的辉煌。在这里提个建议,皇秘里面每次都是江寒青强势出击,征服女人,武林里面也是罗惊天狂霸上床,在本文里面,魔鬼王不妨考虑考虑加大双方之间的感情交流,不纯走霸王硬上弓的戏路,柔情线路多增加点戏份,让文章的内容更加丰富一些,也使你的文笔戏路增加一些情路。
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